There's a lot going on. I like the color choice of the background with the color choice of the text. Just a few things I noticed that are really quick you could try.
On the top one: - The bottom part with "free crunk juice," etc. clashes with the rest of the card. That red is so bold. - The people in the color boxes seems a little much. -I think I'd move "Hosted by" to hug a li'l more around "Bebe's Kids" -The directions are hard to read, maybe a font that's not all caps but still san serif. - I think it's redundant to say "...party on friday" then say "friday april 4th" you can probably get away with saying "the guarenteed crunkest party" on one line and going "Friday, April 4th" - I don't think you need to list the high schools, either if it's "calling all high schools!" - You can barely see the map, does it have to be there? - You could put just "Crank Dat contest" "see details on myspace" and put the myspace address closer to that instead of so far down the page. Make it bigger and in a more legible font. - I like how you aligned the title to the right on the other side, since we read left to right. - I don't think you really need the people, it's so much more powerful with just the one kid on the bottom one and text on the back.
Think the bottom one, all the white text could be aligned to the right. Looks like you center aligned, but since there's not that much information per line, it looks like it wasn't on purpose. - That green info for the myspace gets lost. I like the blue, though, on top of that green color. - The logo seems a bit close to the title. - Do you need the "Yuuuuahhh" part? I know that's part of the song and all, but it's not tilted the same amount, it looks like, as the rest of the title. - I like the dude, cool effect, btw. The one flare isn't too much. - Think you could go without saying "first friday" and just do "friday" unless it's gonna be something like every first friday of the month this is gonna happen, kinda deal.
I really like what you have going on the bottom one, I think if you just tightened it up a bit it'd look straight. I just noticed, though, that you didn't do the same treatment on the title on both sides (I like the white outline, personally, and that darker contrast)
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There's a lot going on. I like the color choice of the background with the color choice of the text. Just a few things I noticed that are really quick you could try.
On the top one:
- The bottom part with "free crunk juice," etc. clashes with the rest of the card. That red is so bold.
- The people in the color boxes seems a little much.
-I think I'd move "Hosted by" to hug a li'l more around "Bebe's Kids"
-The directions are hard to read, maybe a font that's not all caps but still san serif.
- I think it's redundant to say "...party on friday" then say "friday april 4th" you can probably get away with saying "the guarenteed crunkest party" on one line and going "Friday, April 4th"
- I don't think you need to list the high schools, either if it's "calling all high schools!"
- You can barely see the map, does it have to be there?
- You could put just "Crank Dat contest" "see details on myspace" and put the myspace address closer to that instead of so far down the page. Make it bigger and in a more legible font.
- I like how you aligned the title to the right on the other side, since we read left to right.
- I don't think you really need the people, it's so much more powerful with just the one kid on the bottom one and text on the back.
Think the bottom one, all the white text could be aligned to the right. Looks like you center aligned, but since there's not that much information per line, it looks like it wasn't on purpose.
- That green info for the myspace gets lost. I like the blue, though, on top of that green color.
- The logo seems a bit close to the title.
- Do you need the "Yuuuuahhh" part? I know that's part of the song and all, but it's not tilted the same amount, it looks like, as the rest of the title.
- I like the dude, cool effect, btw. The one flare isn't too much.
- Think you could go without saying "first friday" and just do "friday" unless it's gonna be something like every first friday of the month this is gonna happen, kinda deal.
I really like what you have going on the bottom one, I think if you just tightened it up a bit it'd look straight. I just noticed, though, that you didn't do the same treatment on the title on both sides (I like the white outline, personally, and that darker contrast)
Good luck! ^_^
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